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  1. PacxIblix's Avatar
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    Nov 28, 2009, 6:37 AM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #51

    What's wrong with the Death Watch (apart from they're slimy, scum-sucking maggots)?
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    Nov 28, 2009, 11:28 AM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #52

    Yeah I think that about sums it up ner vod
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    Nov 28, 2009, 12:07 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #53

    Quote PacxIblix said: View Post

    Mando'a speakers, help me out here
    KAL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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    Nov 28, 2009, 1:11 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #54

    i did have a chapter but then i played GTA san andreas and forgot about the post and welllll my mother happened
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    Nov 28, 2009, 1:14 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #55

    well post it now vod!!!!
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    Nov 28, 2009, 3:58 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #56

    Sixth Chapter On the search For Galaak

    After Leaving kamino I figured I should start searching for other mandalorians before I began the search for Galaak, I found two mandalorian females on coruscant and requested they join me in the search for galaak, The required a little 'persuasion' that is a little too graphic for this story, but after 'persuading' them to aid me in the search we proceeded to Dxun, and that happened like so...

    There was an Awkward Silence in the transport, we were going too drop to Dxun at Five kilometers up, too low for my comfort. Kira yelled "We are at 10 kilometers, Helmets on!" we all put our helmet on in unison, each sealing with a hiss, she then said over comm" eight kilometers, seven kilometers, six kilometers, repulsor packs on!" My repulsor pack was already on "Zuka you first!" After hearing Zuka I jumped out counted too five and Activated my repulsor pack, then the unthinkable happened and the replusor pack jerked me away from the landing zone and shut off the only thing i had to say was "This is why i never drop from five kilometers" i hit the trees viciously and everything blacked out...
    Too be continued
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    Nov 28, 2009, 9:06 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #57

    Quote Jango 425 said: View Post
    KAL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    huh? what'cha need? lol
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    Nov 28, 2009, 9:09 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #58

    Zuka there's a reason why I have a winged flight pack! lol even if u lose power u can still glide! lmao
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    Nov 28, 2009, 9:11 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #59

    It wasn't because of an empty power cell they where charged before the drop, because of the jerk, the power cell disconnected from the Connection point
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    Nov 28, 2009, 9:13 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #60

    yep... that'll do it! lol
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    Nov 28, 2009, 9:19 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #61

    Levi is gonna hate the ending(its a cliff hanger so he'll be so anxious for the next chapter
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    Nov 28, 2009, 9:30 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #62

    lol oh well, he'll live... just make it a good'un
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    Nov 28, 2009, 9:33 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #63

    Don't yah love how Zuka got it on.... XD
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    Dec 1, 2009, 11:11 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #64

    nice, nice... NOW CONTINUE!!
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    Dec 1, 2009, 11:13 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #65

    Tomorrow Vod tomorrow, now it is time for me too rest
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    Dec 2, 2009, 8:35 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #66

    Seventh Chapter, my Shebs hurt
    my thoughts were saying 'show me the dirt pile and i will pray that the soul can take, three stowaways" when i was phasing out of blackness, I then said "There is a stick up my shebs" I then heard Mira say "Hah **** Zuka sucks to be you" trying to hold the laughter in then burst in laughter over comm
    Kira went straight to protocol and said "Zuka, What happened with your repulsor pack" I replied "It propelled me forward and jerked the power supply cord, Shutting of the power too the pack, I checked my vitals and everything my signal is up, come find me i need some 'Hard contact'. No-" A zakkeg emerged from the trees, I stumbled up, I was looking for my mandalorian ripper, I couldn't find it, I jumped and landed on Beskar'gam from the years of the mandalorian wars, it was Yellow armor, his corpse was clutching his mandalorian disintegrater, I ripped it out of his hand, making dust move with the motion, replaced the energy pack at the rear.

    I ran towards the Zakkeg blasting away, it took two energy packs to down that beast, nothing gruesome happened due to the disintegration process of the blaster.
    After my encounter I searched the area for my ripper and found it I picked it up and spun it into my holster and did the same with the disintegrator
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    Dec 2, 2009, 10:29 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #67

    coming along
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    Dec 3, 2009, 3:40 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #68

    everyone here knows what a zakkeg is right?
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    Dec 3, 2009, 4:59 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #69

    and I quote wookiepedia... "'Its a huge, red lizard that's built like a Baragwin battle tank. It has a hide so thick it might as well be durasteel plating.' ―Mandalorian guard captain.
    Zakkegs were rare alpha-predators indigenous to Dxun. Huge, armored quadrupeds, they were solitary and territorial. Even Mandalorians were impressed by someone who killed one, and one could gain great honor for proving one's success. They preyed upon most creatures which they could catch, including; cannoks, maalraas and even bomas."
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    Dec 3, 2009, 7:20 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #70

    so, KOTE DARASUUM KOTE!
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    Dec 5, 2009, 12:06 AM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #71

    I scrambled the Area for my rifle, I found it on some foliage, Dxun has a lot of foliage. this was were the Mandalorian wars started, didn't seem like much
    "Mira, Kira. I think if Galaak would be here, he would be at the polar ice caps" I Said.
    Mira replied with fierce, clearly disagreeing with my idea
    "Zuka, that would take weeks maybe months to get to the location"
    "Mira, If we use the power packs for our pistols, they'll probably run the repulsor pack for 2 days of steady flight"
    "Zuka, i don't know what power packs you use for your pistols, but ours aren't that powerful, we don't all have weapons from the Mandalorian wars"
    "Mira, you would use your rifle power pack, That'll probably give you 5 days of steady flight"
    "Ok Zuka, you win this little arguement, now how about you get your shebs to our location ASAP."
    I checked the power pack and Saw that the harness for the cord wasn't latching the cord too the power supply, so i plugged in the cords and hooked up the harness and closed up the repulsor pack and latched it too my armor. I had a smooth flight towards Mira and Kira's position, I was prepared to see those two making "relations" with each other. needless to say I had a flash bang detonator handy just in case they are making "relations".
    Upon arrival I said
    "Ladies Here Comes the man who puts the Man in Oh Man, and no that is not his Ripper in his pants, he is quite happy to see you" (just a note i was inspired by someones note for that little part)
    When Mira and Kira heard that, they broke into near simultaneous laughter
    Kira was the first to say "Ok back to the business at hand, we must fly too the north pole, find Galaak, and then call for evacuation, sounds easy"
    I replied
    "Lets get moving, and fast"
    We started too move upward above the trees, we were high. once the last tree top was passed we moved our directions forward, towards the cold north, we encountered a Drexl. I was the first to have there Side arm out, I cocked it back i started to provide cover for Mira and Kira as they are Loading their side arms. my shots were hitting the drexl and Caused only minor wounds. Mira and kira shot their side arms in unison with me, we burned through the drexls Skull and it dropped down and impaled a tree spewing blood at us.
    After the drexl situation we moved onward and onto the north pole
    Part 2 the cold situation
    At the north pole we found Galaak, Frozen into Bacta upon finding Galaak I said
    "Galaak was Frozen also... Mira, kira Blasters on low and fire at the bacta"
    We fired at Galaak some bacta was melting away with every shot, we all ran out after 100 shots, He was almost free. Instinct kicked in and i ran over, I started to punch the ice, a piece shattering off every time, After i was punching the frozen bacta for 5 hours straight, Galaak was freed, I hooked him to my medical computer, all his vitals were at zero...
    To be continued
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    Spoiler: Galaak lives, He was frozen perserving everything so he is able to revived after being under heat to entirely defrost him
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    Dec 6, 2009, 3:52 PM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #72

    very exciting can't wait for more
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    Dec 13, 2009, 12:04 AM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #73

    BUMPED
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    Dec 13, 2009, 12:10 AM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #74

    Nice, very nice...... Continue LOL
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    Jan 2, 2010, 1:24 AM - Re: Rough Draft of my First person story #75

    2010.... Time for a new chapter
    8th Chapter. Galaak Lives
    "300 Volts.... CLEAR" I said with utmost urgency, I then jabbed my hands towards Galaak's now visable chest "No heartbea- Wait. Hes alive, Galaak is alive" There was a Sigh of relieve among The ladies in the backround, I just sat their Anxiously, and very silent waiting for Galaak too Awaken, Eying his vitals, After a cold and gruesome 24 hours, our shelter was built, so we moved Galaak Too the shelter, After another 24 hours, Galaak awoken, Confused about how he got there, He only Remembered me,I proceeded to greet him With my rank, And name like so "Sergent Major, Zuka Zamam, Sir?, do you remember who I am?" He replied "Yeah, ner'vod, what is the Date" "Sir, Its Approxamatly 22 years after our confrontation with the jedi" "Why is your voice so High pitched for a 34 year old?" "Its called Cryogenic Freezing , I was Frozen by the Jedi for 20 years, the last two years were based on finding you, I can't loose you again Lieutenant, Your the Only Friend from the Mandalorian Civil wars, You remember what happened to the closest thing to a father that i had, Murdered by a jedi, While saving a jedi." "Yeah I remember, You took it pretty bad" "Took it bad? TOOK IT BAD! He was the only father I had! I am Scarred from that encounter, both physically and emotionally" I punched Galaak in his jaw during that phrase, he understood my emotional distraught, then i removed my gloves and tossed them towards the ground violently and yelled "LOOK!" "this is what happened too my hands after that ordeal" My hands showed scarring Caused By my attempt at treating Je'karta, His tools cutting my hands, but the most notable feature is my lack of a biological ring finger, Replaced with a prosthetic that I made on the field and then Later replaced by a Prosthetic that i picked up in secret on coruscant.
    __________________________________________________ __________________________________________________ __This chapter shows the emotional pain left after The death of Je'karta. And his actual rank, which honors my Dead Grandfather, Died After world war 2 because of his wounds, He had a leaky heart valve, He died 6 months before the first successful surgery in Canada too fix a leaky heart valve, And i picked Lieutenant for Galaak because i like the ring to it
    (A little info on my grandfather, He was a member of the halifax highlanders, the regiment that was taken prisoner by the SS and then later Executed. He survived with Some more of his friends, Because he got lost. Oh yeah i also revived this thread like i revived galaak

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